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Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #work #company
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Nowadays, a number of people believe that it is better to
work
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 for a big
company
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either
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or
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 a small one. I completely agree that it is more
usefully
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 to
work
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 for a large
company
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. On the one hand,
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work
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working
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 for a small
company
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 has some
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 sides.
For instance
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, the little
company
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’s brand is not more well-known than
a huge companies
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a huge company
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. I mean that
became
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becoming
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 a popular brand is the most important part of business.
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, a small business’ monthly salary for
workers
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 is
so
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much
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 less rather than powerfully built firms.
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, some offices have unprofessional
workers
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that
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it
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 lowers the quality of the
company
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.
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, it is very
challenge
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 for employees to grow in
such
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 corporations.
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,
to
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working
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work
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 for a large corporation has
a
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apply
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several benefits
to
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for
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 many people who want to improve
themselves
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apply
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’ some skills
such
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 as communication skills and learn
few
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some
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 new knowledge.
Firstly
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, the great offices’ monthly
payment
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payments
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 for employees are some more than a mini business. In
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additionally
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,
goodly
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good
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 companies have
a
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apply
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high quality and comfortable places for
workers
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.
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,
that
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it gives
workers
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 a greater motivation to
work
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 harder and more efficiently. Except that all necessary items and resources are provided in large campaigns.
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 why, employees have a lot of opportunities to grow their essential
skill
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skills
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such
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 as networking or learning
team-
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teamwork
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work
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 in
such
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 corporations. In conclusion, many people think that it is more quality to
work
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 for big and strong
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company
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companies
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 rather
that
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than
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 other tiny firms. In my opinion, working for a high corporation has many advantages
than
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over
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 others.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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