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Around the world, rural people are moving to cities and urban areas, so populations in the countryside are decreasing. Is this a positive of negative development?

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Urbanization is a crucial factor
for
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 a country's development, and
this
 has changed over time. Globally, there has been an influx of citizens moving from the countryside to cities.
While
 there are some advantages to
this
, the drawbacks far outweigh them. The main reason that ruralists relocate to cities and out-skirted areas is seeking
for
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better job opportunities. As most of
company's
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 offices are located in urban areas, there are various jobs available for employees.
Furthermore
, payment is usually higher than the average
of
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allowance in rural areas.
For example
, some farmers in Thailand opt to leave agriculture behind and become
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blue-collar
worker
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workers
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 in Bangkok because of well-paid wages.
By contrast
,
majority
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 of metropolitans are experienced with several issues
as a result
 of
density
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the density
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 of
population
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.
First,
pollution including air and noise is the main concern. Since the number of cars in the city has been increasing every year,
the
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 great amount of carbon dioxide has been emitted into the atmosphere which affects residents' health in the long term.
Second,
traffic congestion is undoubtedly
consequence
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a consequence
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 of
increasing
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private
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number of private
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 car owners.
Town people
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Townpeople
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 are faced with long hours of transportation to
workplace
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the workplace
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, especially during peak hours. In conclusion,
although
 moving to the city offers people well-paid jobs, there are
also
 some challenges that arise from overcrowded,
such
 as pollution and traffic jams. In my view,
this
 change is a negative development. The government should allocate a budget to develop facilities and create jobs in
rural
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a rural
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areas
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area
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 parallel to the city.
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