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The media has become too influential in people’s lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#media #people’s #lives #development
It is believed by the
people
 that
media
 has become an influence to the
people
 in
negative
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a negative
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 way in their lives. Despite the community's
struggling
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struggle
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 with a sophisticated life pattern, there has been a growing tendency among them to use
media
 as a crucial strategy for shaping life. I strongly agree with the given statement as it has a negative impact on society.
This
 essay will deeply delve into the reasons for my personal
idea
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ideas
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. On the one hand,
media
 has been the main source of transferring information which is relevant and irrelevant. It has the power to change one's thinking pattern in a keen way.
For instance
, researchers have found that now
people
 tend to eat unhealthy foods
such
 as soft drinks, short eats and other instant edibles as
media
 promote them regularly in commercials.
Moreover
,
according to
 the research
as a result
 of the changed food habits, the number of cancers and other non-communicable diseases is
also
 growing
up
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.
Therefore
 anyone can easily identify the bad effects of the
media
 on society.
On the other hand
,
people
 have become addicted to spending their valuable time in front of a screen. As an example, most of the Sri Lankan women have been practising to spend around 7.00pm to 10.00pm watching foreign teledramas. Because of that reason, they lost valuable time which could have been spent with their family. The most tragic situation is children won't be able to get love and care from
parents
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their parents
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 as they are abandoned
with
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by
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 television than children.
To sum up
, there are more disadvantages of
media
 usage to the society. There is no doubt, that it badly influences one's life and the matter is gradually increasing day by day.
Hence
 it is true,that
Istrongly
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I strongly
 agree with the given statement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influential
  • negative development
  • opinions
  • perceptions
  • unrealistic standards
  • ideals
  • manipulate
  • distort
  • information
  • addiction
  • dependency
  • privacy
  • valuable
  • entertainment
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