the graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to new zealand

the graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to new zealand
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to new zealand
The line chart depicts annual tourist expenditure (in
NZD
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) in New Zealand from five different countries from 1996 to 2014.
Overall
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, China's
visitors
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marked the highest expense
growth
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,
while
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Japan's did the reverse.
In addition
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, visitor
growth
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rate from US, UK, and Australia was almost similar. In the initial period, China's
visitors
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almost spent zero expenditure in New Zealand, and rose dramatically until reached a peak in 2004 (slightly above 500
NZD
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),
then
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decreased gradually to the year 2008 (only leaving half from the apex), and rose again but not exceeding the peak in 2014 with almost 500
NZD
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. Japan's
visitors
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at the beginning of the period scored roughly below 500
NZD
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. It grew and reached its pinnacle in 2002 surpassing 1000
NZD
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, and decreased to its second lowest number with almost 500
NZD
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in 2014. Australia and the US in the initial period were marked as the two largest
visitors
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with almost a hundred
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,
while
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UK
visitors
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became the fourth largest with almost 500
NZD
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.
Moreover
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, Australian and UK visitor expenditures expenditure witnessed fluctuation and ended with a
growth
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rate of approximately two times, but US visitor expenditures experienced a steadier trend with a
growth
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rate of almost two times.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words nzd, visitors, growth with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 7 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expenditure
  • Revenue
  • Tourism sector
  • Economic contribution
  • Fluctuation
  • Peak season
  • Demographics
  • Accommodation
  • Leisure activities
  • Luxury travellers
  • Backpackers
  • Business travellers
  • Souvenirs
  • Global market
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Policy
  • Influx of tourists
  • Consumer spending
  • Tourist attractions
  • Hospitality industry
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