9.The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

9.The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line chart below displays the number of
cases
of car theft, house
burgling
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burglary
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and street robbery in
United
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the United
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Kingdom and Wales from 1970 to 2005.
Overall
,
the
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car stealing increased significantly over the entire time period.
While
robbery
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the robbery
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of houses rose moderately. At the beginning of the
period
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period,
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there were 0.4
million
cases
of car theft,
this
grew steadily to 1
million
over the next 10
years
, before increasing dramatically
in
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to
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0.6
million
in the next 5
years
. From 1995
this
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these
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crime
cases
started to drop sharply,
where
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whereas
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in 2005 it went back to 1
million
, maintaining its position
of
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as
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the most committed crime. In 1970, 0.2
million
house burgling happened, it doubled in the first five
years
, from 1975 to 1980,
this
steeply peaked, where in 1980 there
where
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were
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around 0.9
million
of
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cases
, in the same year it started to fall moderately to 0.6
million
in 1985. From 1985 to 1990, it slightly rocketed to approximately 0.7
million
,
this
was maintained during the next five
years
and during the
last
10
years
it
felt
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fell
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modestly, ending the period at just over 0.5
million
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cases, million, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "moderately" was used 2 times.
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