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Some people think universities should provide knowledge and skills related to a future career; others think the true function of university is to give access to knowledge for its own sake. What is your opinion of the main function of university?

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Universities
 are one of the most important institutions in modern society. Post-secondary education provides both general skills and knowledge and sometimes job-specific training. But which of these two should be the main
focus
?
While
 many
people
 might think the
focus
 should only be the "jobs", I believe
universities
 play a larger social role. Let us consider that we live in an
information
 age. If
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students
wants
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 to learn about accounting
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history or other job-specific
information
, they do not need to sit in a classroom to get it. Nowadays, anyone can get
information
 and knowledge online and can learn on their own. So surely
universities
 aren't needed for
this
 purpose.
Instead
, what
universities
 should
focus
 on is developing critical thinking. Anyone can memorise facts and get
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 training, but not everyone can think and analyse.
This
 is a far more important skill in the real
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. To be able to process
information
, understand it and use it, these are the skills our
universities
 should
focus
 on building.
This
 is not to say that
universities
 should not pay any attention to the workplace. Of
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 all graduates want to find
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 job. But if you ask most
people
 in the workplace today, they will tell you that the specific skills required for their jobs were learned on-site. And if you ask most employers what they are looking for in employees, they will tell you that it is a mind that can "think outside of the box." So
while
universities
 play a role in training
people
 for the workplace, they primarily function as a place for training the mind. What most companies and workforces need are not robots, but creative
people
 who can contribute ideas.
Universities
 should be the driving force in nurturing
such
people
.
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