The graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular carribean island between 2010 and 2017

The graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular carribean island between 2010 and 2017
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The line chart depicts information about the
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visitors
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visitor's
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proportion
visited
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who visited
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a specific country called Carribean
island
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Island
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, over an 18-year period, starting from 2010. In general, it can be seen that the total tourists quantity increased over the period shown.
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, the
visitors
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lived in
crusie
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cruise
ships the most than stayed on
island
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the island
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. The total number of
visitors
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was 3.5. Upon closer examination of the data, it is evident that the number of
visitors
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staying on
island
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the island
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started from 0.2 to 0.5 between 2010 and 2011.
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, it fell to 0.2 again in 2012.
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, the proportion increased
subsequently
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and rose to 2 in 2017. Taking a closer look at the remaining data, there was a substantial constant in
visitors
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number who spent on cruise ships from 2010 to 2011, which is 0.75. The figure for the cruise ship quantity increased to 1.45 but again remained
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at 1.5 from 2013 to 2015
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it dropped to 1.45.
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but not least, it increased to 1.5 in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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