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Should celebrities give up the right to privacy?Give your opinion

#celebrities #right #privacy
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Nowadays, the entertainment industry is developing rapidly and credit goes to the
media
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. Some
people
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 believe that famous personalities are earning based on public spotlight and they do not have the
right
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 to complain that the public is violating their
privacy
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.
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, my opinion contradicts the given statement. In the following paragraphs, the reason supporting my idea will be discussed in detail. Apparently,
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 the
right
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 to act
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conviction
, everyone has an equal
right
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 to
privacy
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 and celebrities are not an exception here. Without the light of the stage they are
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 normal
people
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 like all of us and they have the
right
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 to enjoy their private life.
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, if they do not want to share their relationships or any other personal aspect of their lives
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people
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 need to respect their decision.
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, when famous actress Anushka Sharma shared on social
media
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 that they were not ready to make her baby's public appearance until she reached a
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certain level of age.some
media
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 organisations supported them and respected their
privacy
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. Other than
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, It is inevitable that social
media
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 has a negative impact on famous
people
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. With the eye of
paparazzi
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, they need to be very careful in the course of what they are doing, who they are meeting, who they are dating and even what they are eating which is totally unfair. They are not an animal in the zoo and folks do not have
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right
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 to control them.
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, they spend most of their time in entertainment as well and they are role models for many. They can be stressed by work just like us or even more.
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, they deserve to be happy with their loved ones on vacation or on weekends without any distractions from mass
mediamedia
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media media
. In conclusion, It is normal to get attention from well-known personalities but they
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 require some long time with their private lives without constant intervention by mass
mediamedia
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media media
. If
people
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 will respect their
privacy
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 they will be happy to live their life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • celebrities
  • privacy
  • media intrusion
  • negative consequences
  • responsibility
  • role models
  • sacrifice
  • balancing
  • public's right to know
  • complex issue
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