Write about the following topic. It has been noted that many people who had a big impact on the world gave themselves completely to their work and did not bother with the idea of “work-life balance”. To what extent should people try to have a good work-life balance? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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that people who had important impacts
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humanity haven't had any free
time
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work
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conclusion is questionable. In
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balance for
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body and mind. First of all, individuals who have
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an active
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schedule are not able to
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or do any exercises at all.
This
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people to struggle with both physical and mental health problems.
For
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reason, people should consider
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free
time
rather than working all day long.
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this
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their projects. If a person knows how to manage
time
considering all the responsibilities he/she needs to look after, he/she will
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achieve
to
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success
.
For instance
, my best friend who is a promising young scientist is
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gaining
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practising yoga which is very
usefull
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useful
for her
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mental
stability. Long story short, individuals need to find
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extra
time
to socialise,
workout
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and
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other activities to feel good and improve the quality of their
work
performances.
This
is the only way that they can find inner peace.
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task achievement
Add a stronger thesis statement in the introduction to clearly state your position on the topic.
task achievement
Provide more relevant examples to support your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the main points are well-developed and supported with explanations or evidence.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use more precise and varied language.
grammatical range accuracy
Review your grammar to ensure accurate sentence structures and proper use of verb tenses.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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