Write about the following topic. It has been noted that many people who had a big impact on the world gave themselves completely to their work and did not bother with the idea of “work-life balance”. To what extent should people try to have a good work-life balance? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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balance for
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body and mind. First of all, individuals who have
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an active
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or do any exercises at all.
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people to struggle with both physical and mental health problems.
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free
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this
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their projects. If a person knows how to manage
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considering all the responsibilities he/she needs to look after, he/she will
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achieve
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success
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, my best friend who is a promising young scientist is
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practising yoga which is very
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mental
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extra
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and
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other activities to feel good and improve the quality of their
work
performances.
This
is the only way that they can find inner peace.
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Add a stronger thesis statement in the introduction to clearly state your position on the topic.
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Provide more relevant examples to support your arguments.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Burnout
  • Job satisfaction
  • Work-life harmony
  • Emotional support
  • Career sustainability
  • Productivity
  • Creativity
  • Well-rounded
  • Adaptable
  • Flexible working hours
  • Remote work options
  • Wellness programs
  • Physical well-being
  • Mental well-being
  • Stress
  • Efficiency
  • Innovation
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