some believe that single-sex school students perform better academically. However, others believe that both geneder schools provide children with best social skills for adulthood. Discuss both perspective and give opinion.

Nowadays, some
group
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of people have an idea
like
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that
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single-sex
education
must be prioritised because they think that
this
style of
education
opens the doors for academic achievements.
While another
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group of people support
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gender
education
because it has
crucial
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a crucial
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impact on kids' growing skills.
Firstly
, there aren't any sources that support the idea
of
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that
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single-sex
education
has
important
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an important
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impact on academic success.
This
blief
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belief
brief
may come
along with
parents who are more conservative compared to others. Because it is highly
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that
one
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one-gender
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gender
education
helps children to improve their academic skills. Even though there are some examples of it, there are no exact statistics to prove of achievement.
Secondly
multiple
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apply
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gender
education
which is the classical one helps kids to understand the needs of
other
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the other
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sex.
This
is important because children may be able to gain empathy skills to differences
wlth
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with
this
type of
education
system
. There are maybe some people who had great achievements in academia after
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from single-sex schools
however
, there are much more
successfull
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successful
student examples who graduated from the
both
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gender
education
system
. In conclusion, there is no need to make a huge change in
education
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the education
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system
such
as single-sex
education
. Because it may only cause
dangeorus
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dangerous
problems more than we have been already dealing with. It is better to
countinue
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continue
to have both
gender
education
system
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and look for improving
it
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them
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.
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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic performance
  • social skills
  • gender stereotypes
  • distractions
  • tailored teaching
  • confidence-building
  • co-educational
  • promote
  • real-world diversity
  • teamwork
  • cooperation
  • understanding
  • respect
  • perspective
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