In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes than bying them. What are the advantage and disadvantages of renting a home?

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is renting or buying your own
house
. Most people choose to rent a
house
rather than
buying
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one.
This
is mainly because it is cheaper and
convenient
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more convenient
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.
However
, renting a home
also
has some cons,
such
as lack of space and bossy landlords.
This
essay will discuss both of these aspects.
To begin
with,
firstly
renting a flat is more affordable than purchasing it.
For instance
, in Almaty, the price of a
house
to buy is twice as expensive
than
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a rented property.
Secondly
, it is more comfortable to stay in
rented
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a rented
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flat.
For example
, it is easier for people to live in a
house
closer to their work, compared to travelling from home to
workplace
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the workplace
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daily. On the
second
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other
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hand, it is difficult to find an apartment that fits your preferences
also
landlord
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the landlord
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might be extremely rude.
For example
, my friend had
situation
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when
landlord
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the landlord
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always showed up and entered in apartment without permission.
Also
landlord
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the landlord
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forbided
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forbade
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throwing
partys
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parties
,
make
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making
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a lot of
noises
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noise
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,even turning on
tv
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the tv
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or listening
music
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to music
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, inviting guests.
Therefore
, living in rented houses can be very uncomfortable and invade our privacy. On a final note, in my opinion, even though renting a
house
has a lot of pros and fast
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to get a roof over your head, it is a wise decision to invest in your own property.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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