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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village.
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The given map depicts the changes that have taken place in
the
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Chorleywood
village
 near London, during the period of 1868 to 1994.
These development
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also
 lead to a rise in the
poulation
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population
.
Overall
, the most prominent developments that can be seen
in
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 the map are the construction of the main roads, the motorway and the railway. The addition of a
village
 park, a
golfcourse
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golf course
 and a station were
also
 done over the years.
Firstly
, two highways can be seen running from the north to the southwest and the other one towards the east.
Along with
 that, the Chorleywood Park and Golf
course
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 were built between 1868 and 1883. There was the addition of the
village
 station along the southern end of the main road from 1883
ti
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 1992. The railway line was built from
went
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west
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 to east in 1909, which passes
this
 station. The regions on the
south-weatern
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south-western
south-eastern
 side of the railway were added during the period
ofn1992
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of 1992
- 1970.
Furthermore
, a motorway was
devloped
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developed
 connecting the northern and the southern end of the
village
 in 1970. Several areas were made for the villagers on either side of
this
 way, providing them with the
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Steadily
  • Pivotal events
  • Significant change
  • Transportation links
  • Commuter village
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial areas
  • Public facilities
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental impact
  • Community life
  • Conservation efforts
  • Maintaining character
  • Vicinity
  • Unique aspects
  • Common challenges
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