The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps illustrate the
ammendments
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amendments
made at the seaside hotel of Templeton for a period of fifteen years, since 1990.
Overall
, many developments to infrastructure have been made
while
extending the transport
facilities
throughout Templeton,
in contrast
to the roads and
bridge
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bridges
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that remain unchanged. In the top half, right-hand side of the map, an airport adjacent to the existing school and more housing
facilities
adjoining the hospital were implemented.
Moreover
, many apartment complexes were simultaneously developed
in
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the top, left-hand side around the lake. As per the bottom left corner, a new supermarket was introduced
along with
massive residential buildings
while
demolishing the
exisiting
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existing
houses,
subsequently
increasing potential customers. A factory was added to the area and the railway lines were extended throughout the resort.
Furthermore
, a ferry was
also
added to enhance the transport
facilities
for the inhabitants.
However
, massive deforestation
was
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taken place in order for
the
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modern
facilities
and developments to take place. In 2005, residents in Templeton had improved their quality of life
siginficantly
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significantly
with more residential and transport
facilities
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words facilities with synonyms.
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