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With a growing population, many people believe that we should focus on producing more GM foods. What are advantages and disadvantages of doing this?

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It is true that nowadays, humanity is really close to facing the issue of overpopulation, which might be avoided,
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 some, with the help of
GM
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 foods. In
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 I will discuss the positive sides of
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 changes in
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 the drawbacks they bring
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 our society. The first evident benefit is that people can change an organism’s genetic code without the appearance of any unwanted characteristics.
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, selective breeding, which is an alternative to genetic modification, may produce mixed results and unwanted traits in the process. The targeted modification of DNA,
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, has allowed scientists to avoid
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 problem.
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, the affordability of
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 foods is likely to be higher than that of products received via traditional farming. Producing
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 products takes far less time, because of specific genetic modifications that allow plants and animals to grow faster.
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, some genetic changes can make
food
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 have a longer shelf life, a better taste and even some important nutrients that humanity does not consume enough. All
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 is likely to drive the prices down, allowing more people to consume a sufficient amount of
food
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. Turning to the other side of the argument, severe health issues caused by
GM
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 can still happen and be considered
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a disadvantage. Genetic engineering typically changes an organism in a way that would not occur naturally;
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, it may have a negative influence on one's health and can cause serious illnesses
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 as cancer and severe allergies. Taking everything into consideration,
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 there are certain advantages to
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 products
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 as no unwanted traits, longer shelf life, better taste and so on, there is still a serious disadvantage connected with health problems. Personally, I believe that it is important to look at both
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 and negative sides of
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 production to make the right decision.
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introduction conclusion present
Provide a clear thesis statement in the introduction that states your overall position on the topic.
supported main points
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coherence cohesion
Organize your essay in a logical and coherent manner, ensuring that the ideas flow smoothly.
complete response
Make sure to address both the advantages and disadvantages of producing GM foods.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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