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The preventing and reducing global environmental damage lies with politicians, as there are very little the individuals can do about this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#damage #politicians #individuals
People agree that there are only basic things that individuals can do about climate change and environmental damage so
this
 is why most politicians need to afford to reduce all the damage on the planet. I agree with
this
 statement and it will be explained why I support
this
 opinion in
this
 essay. First of all, climate change is one of the most crucial issues nowadays. The reason behind
of
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this
 problem is people, there is no doubt about it. Individuals` careless behaviours caused
many damages
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 on
earth
 which is non-returnable
however
, the effects of the damages may decrease by meaningful acts. These acts should be coming either from politicians or the people who have a critical economic impact on countries. Because in
this
 situation, normal citizens have no economic or physical power to prevent
this
 kind of big challenge. So, here is the question: What kind of solutions may be established by the governments to protect the
earth
 from the harmful effects of climate change or any other environmental problems?
Firstly
, regulation needs to be completed and consider environmental rights as a priority.
Secondly
, there has to be a strategic plan that how to use natural sources.
This
 plan may include; how much capacity of natural sources
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we have
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 How long do we need it without producing any other sources that help us to live without
giving
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 any harm to the
earth
? And
finally
 what kind of solutions should be used realistically? In conclusion, when it comes to reducing environmental damage, governments and politicians take the first place to make an act.
This
 is the only way from preventing to
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 any more damages. Individual movements won`t have quite enough effect to protect the
earth
 lack of economic and physical reasons.
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