26.Developments in science and technology have caused environmnetal problems. Some people think that a simpler way of life will protect the environment, while others believe that science and technology can solve environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is argued that the evolution of
the
Correct article usage
apply
technology
and science
caused problems
in the environment, some say that a
easier method of life will save the environment, Change the article
an
while
others would argue that technology
and science
can help people to look for answers to these issues. This
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argue that Wrong verb form
will
although
a simpler life will reduce contamination
, I believe it is better to use automation and scientists to solve ecological issues.
On the one hand, a
easy life will protect the environment. If there were neither Change the article
an
technology
nor science
, lots of products won’t
be created, and some inventions and factories Correct your spelling
wouldn’t
won’t
be able to be used, Correct your spelling
wouldn’t
as a consequence
, people are
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would be
enable
to pollute so much, since only human labour would be used in all activities. Correct your spelling
able
For example
, it has been shown that centuries before, when the Industrial Revolution did not happen yet, there were
no global warming Change the verb form
was
neither
climate change. Correct word choice
or
However
, I believe that there are some problems
, such
as the amount of rubbish that it
is produced, since there is no way to make them disappear, Correct pronoun usage
apply
so
it will still contaminate, but more slowly.
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On the other hand
, science
and technology
can solve environmental problems
. It is true that after the revolution with the new technologies and other machines lead contamination
in the air. But at the same time, lots of scientists are trying with experiments and technology
to solve climate change and global warming problems
. For instance
, the creation of electric cars decrease
the use of gasoline, so Correct subject-verb agreement
decreases
less
natural places need to be destroyed Correct quantifier usage
fewer
for finding
sources of energy, Change preposition
to find
then
, contamination
reduces
. I believe Wrong verb form
is reduced
this
point of view is preferable because a lot of new inventions are being produced so the problems
that individuals are facing can be solved.
In conclusion, although
less contamination
can be produced with a simply
Change the word
simple
life-style
, Correct your spelling
lifestyle
but
in Remove the conjunction
apply
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the long-term
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long-term,
long-term
it will still cause environmental Correct your spelling
long term
problems
, and that is
why it is better to use technology
and science
to solve these issues.Submitted by elenazheng1211 on
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