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In order to solve traffic problems government should tax private cars owners heavily and use the money to improve public transport. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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Advancement
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The advancement
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 of technology has made
life
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the life
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 of human beings very soft. It is super easy to purchase a car by getting
loan
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a loan
the loan
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 in
this
 era. To reduce the traffic issues, the Government is applying high taxes on private
vehicles
 and investing money to improve
public
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the public
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 transport system.
This
 idea has merits and demerits, which will be discussed in upcoming paragraphs. Taxing on private transport is encouraging people to use public
vehicles
.
Due to
 the
fact
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fact,
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 there is
decrease
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a decrease
the decrease
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 in the number of
vehicles
 on the road. It leads to improvement of air quality in the areas. To add,
health
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the health
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 of individuals would be better with less air pollution.
Moreover
, to take the public bus people have to walk or run which leads to
addition
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the addition
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 of more physical activities to their routine.It would help them to maintain their health. Every rose has thorns . Applying high
terriffs
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tariffs
 on private
vehicles
 has some cons as well.
First,
Mass will have more preference
to
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for
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 public
vehicles
 than their own. Buses and trains will be crowded. There will be a lot of chaotic work to meet their requirements.Transport service is not available for some
aseas
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areas
seas
users
 as well.
Second,
car
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the car
a car
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 is more comfortable when you have to leave in urgency or at
specific
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the specific
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 time than
public
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a public
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 Commute.
To conclude
, it is
pretty
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a pretty
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 good idea to solve the traffic problems.
But
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However
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, the Government should prioritize the safety of citizens and improve
transportation
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the transportation
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 system before implementing
tax
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a tax
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 on
vehicles
.
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