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ou recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter: say which part-time course you booked explain why you need to cancel your booking ask about booking a different course

#ou #course #college #administrator
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 email to inform you of the possibility of changing my part-time
course
 which is the audio engineering class that I enrolled in
last
 month.
This
 program is the most popular module at your college, and if I have enough time to study I would love to keep
this
 class as my first semester.
Due to
 my visa conditions, I could not stay longer than 6 months for any purpose in
this
 country which means I would need to apply for another subclass visa to support my current issues. Especially, the audio
course
 needs more than 6 months to complete a diploma certification.
For
this
 reason, I would like to cancel my booking for
this
 module before the
course
 starts.
However
,
besides
 the time limit and I have looked at the
course
 website, it has a three-month
course
 for physical practice for students to understand the process of live sound music. I am wondering if you could change my audio engineering
course
 to
this
 short-term module
that
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 would much appreciate it. Should you require
further
 information, please let me know. Your Faithfully, William Mot
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task achievement
Reorganize the content of the letter to follow a clear and logical structure. Start with a proper introduction, then explain the reasons for cancelling the booking, and finally, make the request to change the course.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter should be more formal. Use 'Dear' instead of 'Dear Sir or Madam' and consider using 'Yours faithfully' instead of 'Your faithfully'
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea or topic. Reorganize the content into paragraphs that address the different points separately.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Part-time course
  • Booking
  • Cancel
  • Administrator
  • Enrollment
  • Change
  • Availability
  • Registration
  • Refund
  • Reschedule
  • Inconvenience
  • Suitable
  • Options
  • Alternative
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