some people say that fashion affects our lives in a negative way. However, others say that it has more positive effects on our lives. discuss both views and give your opinion.

Someone
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consider that there are bad impacts of our life of being modern designs,
While
Others think that the effective sides comprise more.
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essay will give statements to both
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. To my mind, These
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more affectives than positives.
To begin
with, Today's
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have been becoming well-known in the world.
People
, Especially, Women like wearing modern clothes. When they go out
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they
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street, they will dress up
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which
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they
are wishing
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dress. So, Looking at these, their character will alter.
This
condition is pitiful.
As a result
of choosing clothes properly, they impact their
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, Meanwhile, Like these
people
called
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bad-tempered.
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, their work does not grow up, because of behaving themselves high. As an example, Some artists have
above
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situation.
While
wearing fashionable dresses, they will forget that in old times who they are. Writing about effective sides,
People
will be with news, One of
this
part is related to the fashion. Right, Creating new collections will help
to
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me to
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be an open-minded person.
As a consequence
of creating and dressing up different types of magnificent dresses, they are over the mood.
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, their mood will grow
up
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and It will multiply to trust themselves.
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, In My
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neighbor
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it has been followed the same circumstances. If they wear modern, they feel so good themselves, But they do not
loss
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who they are. In extreme self-confidence
people
,
this
will be followed, but, in all
people
are not.
To sum up
, In general, Both sides have plus and minuses, My opinion has more negatives than
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positives
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