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some people say that fashion affects our lives in a negative way. However, others say that it has more positive effects on our lives. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 consider that there are bad impacts of our life of being modern designs,
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 Others think that the effective sides comprise more.
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idea
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ideas
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. To my mind, These
has
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 more affectives than positives.
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 with, Today's
trend
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trends
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 have been becoming well-known in the world.
People
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, Especially, Women like wearing modern clothes. When they go out
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on they
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they
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the
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 street, they will dress up
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in which
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which
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what
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 they
are wishing
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wish to
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 dress. So, Looking at these, their character will alter.
This
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 condition is pitiful.
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 of choosing clothes properly, they impact their
behaves
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, Meanwhile, Like these
people
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called
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are called
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 bad-tempered.
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, their work does not grow up, because of behaving themselves high. As an example, Some artists have
above
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the above
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 situation.
While
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 wearing fashionable dresses, they will forget that in old times who they are. Writing about effective sides,
People
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 will be with news, One of
this
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 part is related to the fashion. Right, Creating new collections will help
to
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me to
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 be an open-minded person.
As a consequence
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 of creating and dressing up different types of magnificent dresses, they are over the mood.
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, their mood will grow
up
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and It will multiply to trust themselves.
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, In My
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neighbor,
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neighbor
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 it has been followed the same circumstances. If they wear modern, they feel so good themselves, But they do not
loss
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lose
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 who they are. In extreme self-confidence
people
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,
this
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 will be followed, but, in all
people
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 are not.
To sum up
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, In general, Both sides have plus and minuses, My opinion has more negatives than
postives
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positives
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