the chart below shows the results of survey about people coffee and tea buying and drinking habit in five australian cities.

the chart below shows the results of survey about people coffee and tea buying and drinking habit in five australian cities.
The bar chart gives information about the survey of
coffe
Correct your spelling
coffee
and tea consumption and
habit
Fix the agreement mistake
habits
show examples
in five
australian
Change the capitalization
Australian
show examples
ports in the
last
four weeks.
Overall
, it can be seen that
people
in Adelaide prefer to drink and
bought
Wrong verb form
buy
show examples
instant
coffe
Correct your spelling
coffee
,
while
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
most of society in
other
Correct article usage
the other
show examples
four cities have
habit
Add an article
a habit
the habit
show examples
in
Change preposition
of
show examples
drinking fresh
coffee
. The highest number of
people
Correct pronoun usage
who enjoyed
show examples
enjoyed
Wrong verb form
enjoy
show examples
coffee
and tea in a cafe are from Melbourne and Hobart, with around 60% respectively.
Similarly
,
people
in Sydney and Brisban
whom
Change the pronoun
who
show examples
enjoyed it accounted for 60% and over 50% each. Meanwhile,
community
Correct article usage
the community
show examples
in Adelaide is the
least
Correct word choice
lowest
show examples
(just below 40%) in comparison with those in other countries.
In contrast
, the consumption of fresh brewed
coffee
only
Add a missing verb
is only
show examples
40% in Sydney and Melbourne. The second highest is Hobart with roughly 40%
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
and the other ports with approximately 40%.
In addition
, the majority of
people
in Adelaide drink instant
coffee
more likely than
people
in the other two categories.
However
, the highest consumed of instant
coffee
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
show examples
in Hobart and Brisbane with just over half
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
. Following that, society in Melbourne stood at under half,
while
people
in Sydney accounted for above 40%.
Submitted by sidneynatasha16 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee with synonyms.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: