some people think that government is wasting money on art and that money could be better spent somewhere. Do you agree or disagree.

Art
is profoundly important as it reflects
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culture
and
a
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way
to represent its
people
.
However
, it has become a debatable issue whether
government
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should spend
money
on
the
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art
or should that
money
be utilised for other purposes like building roads, constructing buildings etc. I vehemently believe that
money
should be spent on
art
. It is undeniably true that
art
is the
way
to preserve
the
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culture
and history. To explain it
further
, there are many paintings and artistic
work
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works
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that reflect
country’s
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a country’s
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heritage and resonate
its
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with its
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history, when
people
see
this
kind of
work
, it helps them to understand their ancestor’s life and the
way
they lived. If
government
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will
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not spend
money
to preserve
this
form of
work
,
then
they might lose the treasure for
their
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future generations.
For example
, in Australia, 78% of Indigenous
people
’s history and
culture
have been passed down to
their
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next generations through paintings.
Hence
, spending
money
on
art
is an important
way
to save and convey the
culture
and tradition of any
country
.
Furthermore
,
art
is the means to earn
money
or
in other words
, it is employment for some citizens. If
government
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the government
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will
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does
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not take
initiative
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the initiative
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for it, or will not spend any
money
,
firstly
, it will discourage the creative
people
of the
country
, and some might not be able to survive because they earn
money
by selling their
work
either to
government
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or to museums. It is irrefutable, that
art
attract
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tourists which
further
rose
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employment
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rate in the
country
. Since
,
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popular tourist destinations are characterised because of
its
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their
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unique
art
. Any
country
where
government
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the government
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will not spend
money
to preserve
art
;
it
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cannot attract
people
around
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from around
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the globe.
For instance
, the popular city Jaipur of India has recorded an influx of tourism because of its unique stone artwork from medieval
time
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times
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, and
government
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is spending thousands of dollars every year to keep it safe.
Consequently
,
this
city has recorded
higher
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rate of jobs as compared
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any other part
in
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India. In conclusion,
art
is the
way
to represent
country
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the country
a country
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and its
people
, so,
money
should be spent by
government
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the government
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on it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • promoting cultural diversity
  • stimulates economic growth
  • creative industries
  • revenue
  • economic competitiveness
  • quality of life
  • wellbeing
  • social cohesion
  • strategic investment
  • sustainable development
  • accountability
  • extravagant
  • resilience
  • public discourse
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