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some people think that government is wasting money on art and that money could be better spent somewhere. Do you agree or disagree.

#people #government #money #art
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Art
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 is profoundly important as it reflects
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country’s
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a country’s
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culture
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 and
a
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is a
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way
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 to represent its
people
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.
However
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, it has become a debatable issue whether
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government
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the government
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 should spend
money
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 on
the
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art
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 or should that
money
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 be utilised for other purposes like building roads, constructing buildings etc. I vehemently believe that
money
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 should be spent on
art
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. It is undeniably true that
art
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 is the
way
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 to preserve
the
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culture
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 and history. To explain it
further
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, there are many paintings and artistic
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work
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works
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 that reflect
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country’s
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a country’s
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 heritage and resonate
its
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with its
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 history, when
people
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 see
this
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 kind of
work
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, it helps them to understand their ancestor’s life and the
way
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 they lived. If
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government
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the government
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will
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does
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 not spend
money
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 to preserve
this
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 form of
work
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,
then
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 they might lose the treasure for
their
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future generations.
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, in Australia, 78% of Indigenous
people
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’s history and
culture
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 have been passed down to
their
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the
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 next generations through paintings.
Hence
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, spending
money
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 on
art
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 is an important
way
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 to save and convey the
culture
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 and tradition of any
country
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.
Furthermore
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,
art
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 is the means to earn
money
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 or
in other words
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, it is employment for some citizens. If
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government
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the government
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will
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does
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 not take
initiative
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the initiative
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 for it, or will not spend any
money
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,
firstly
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, it will discourage the creative
people
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 of the
country
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, and some might not be able to survive because they earn
money
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 by selling their
work
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 either to
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government
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the government
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 or to museums. It is irrefutable, that
art
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attract
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attracts
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 tourists which
further
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rose
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increases
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employment
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the employment
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 rate in the
country
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. Since
,
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 popular tourist destinations are characterised because of
its
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their
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 unique
art
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. Any
country
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 where
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government
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the government
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 will not spend
money
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 to preserve
art
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;
it
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apply
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cannot attract
people
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around
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from around
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 the globe.
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, the popular city Jaipur of India has recorded an influx of tourism because of its unique stone artwork from medieval
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times
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, and
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government
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the government
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 is spending thousands of dollars every year to keep it safe.
Consequently
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,
this
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 city has recorded
higher
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a higher
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 rate of jobs as compared
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to
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 any other part
in
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of
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 India. In conclusion,
art
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 is the
way
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 to represent
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country
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the country
a country
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 and its
people
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, so,
money
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 should be spent by
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government
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the government
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 on it.
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