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Many people prefer to watch foreign films than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In many countries,
people
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give preference
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prefer
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 to watch
movies
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 made by
the
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forelgn
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foreign
 countries, rather
that
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than
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 local. There are several reasons for these occasions, and from my
perspective
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perspective,
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 financial support will provide a solution for
this
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. The first reason for
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 related to the
interest
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 of
people
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 in the lifestyle of foreign
people
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.
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 happens
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 the fact that
people
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 residing in
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.own country
are
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 aware of the lifestyle there,
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interest
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 for the foreign one is approved.
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 watching, they unconsciously compare the places,
events
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and events
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 with the local
movies
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 and
this
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increase
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increases
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in
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their in
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interest
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for
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watching.
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, I always show
interest
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 in watching foreign
movles
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movies
moves
, creates
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because they seem more gripping for me in comparison to the local
movies
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 They lack in something that needs
be
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 improved.
Second
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 reason Is related to the quality of the movie.
Ilt
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It
 is obvious that all
movies
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 differ
with
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in
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the
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apply
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quality.
Mostly
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Most
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people
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 enjoy watching
movies
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 created by
the
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foreign movie creating company that
has
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have
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 a big influence, a wide range of actors and a variety of
high quality
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high-quality
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 cameras.
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 Hollywood, It had budgeted a lot of efforts for improving in that area. As time passed, they got more professional, the
movies
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 were more gripping, and
people
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 were excited to watch the
movies
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.
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 everything that
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has
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 been stated so far, local
movies
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 need support from the government
for being
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to be
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 raised to a higher level in the film industry, so most of the local residents will
get
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be
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 attracted by them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Cinematic expertise
  • Diverse narratives
  • Enriching cultural experience
  • Linguistic proficiency
  • Cinematography advancements
  • Government subsidies
  • Promote local talent
  • Economic sustainability
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