the charts below show the number of university students in a particular country and how much the government spent on each student between 1984 and 2009 as well as the financial condition of the student's families. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the charts below show the number of university students in a particular country and how much the government spent on each student between 1984 and 2009 as well as the financial condition of the student's families. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given charts illustrate
the
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apply
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how many
students
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addtended
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attended
in universities and how much
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government
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the government
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spent
for
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apply
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per
student
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from 1984 to 2009.
Overall
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,
student
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participation has gradually risen in universities over the period
while
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the
government
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payment
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continuosly
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continuously
went down per
student
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. In 1984,
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the numder
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numder
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number
of university
students
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were
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was
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150,000 after 5 years it increased to 250,000 but
1994
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in 1994
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college
student
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attendance showed
slightly
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a slightly
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decreased to 200,000.
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However
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However,
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after 1994, campus pupils were grown up till 2009. In 2009, 400,000
number of
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apply
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students
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participated in universities, compared to 1994, in 2009 number of
students
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were
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doubled.
However
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, the
government
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payment
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per
student
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was
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apply
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showed
decrease
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a decreasing
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trend. They spent around 14,250/- per
student
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in 1984 but in 1989, it dropped to 12,500/- per
student
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after that it showed a
slightly
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slight
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growth, which was
aroung
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around
12,750/. After 1994, the
goverment
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government
payment
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illustrated
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a dramatical
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dramatical
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dramatic
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drop till 2004, in 2004,
it
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they
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stopped
in
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at
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11,250/-. And again the
payment
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represented
slightly
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slight
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growth. In 2009, the
government
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paid around 11,600/- per
student
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while
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the number of
students
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were
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was
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400,000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, government, student, payment with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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