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The given 3 pie charts represents the number of percentage of all students, PhD students and junior students who read in per week a journal articles at an Australian university.

The given 3 pie charts represents the number of percentage of all students, PhD students and junior students who read in per week a journal articles at an Australian university.
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The given 3 pie charts
represents
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 the
number of
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percentage
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 of all
students
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,
PhD
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students
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 and junior
students
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 who read in per week
a journal
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a journal article
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articles
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 at an Australian university. Each chart describes the
percentage
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 of read journal
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 from 1 to 12+. The noticeable feature we can
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see
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 in each chart
that
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is that
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PhD
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students
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 read the vast majority of
articles
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 than other
students
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. The junior lecturers read three out of four
articles
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 which is much less than
PhD
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students
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.
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, 99
percentages
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 of junior lecturers read more than 1 to 5
articles
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 in a week. The highest
percentage
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 of read
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 from 1 to 5 by all
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 is 67%. The lowest one is read by junior lecturers as little as 15%. The
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 of read
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of
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 all
students
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 and
PhD
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students
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 from 6 to 11
almost
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 the same. The general statement that I can make about each chart is that
,
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PhD
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students
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 read the hefty 80% by reading twenty and more.
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,
PhD
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 read a modest twelve
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percentage
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 from two
sphere
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spheres
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. When we compare, the number of read
articles
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 will be overwhelming.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, students, phd, articles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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