Around the world it is likely that more adults will work from home, and more children will study from home, as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this will be a positive or negative deuelopment?

Dear Sir or Madam, I have attended a few lessons
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the music course at the local community
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. I had an idea to learn how to compose music and
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class and a skilled tutor but it is not a program that I need.
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refund of some amount of money. I know that it is my fault but I hope for your cooperation. Yours faithfully, Basil Turkin
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • increased productivity
  • reduced commuting time
  • flexibility
  • convenience
  • lack of social interaction
  • potential distractions
  • limited access to resources
  • facilities
  • increased isolation
  • mental health issues
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