Public celebrations (such as national days, festivals etc) are held in most countries. These are often quite expensive and some people say that governments should spend money on more useful things. Do you agree or disagree?

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The public display of culture through
celebrations
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has been a matter of debate for years as most
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argue for its necessity as it contributes to a huge loss in the nation’s capital. In the meantime, certain groups of
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often express their dissatisfaction
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the
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cutting
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to
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events
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, debating in support of large public
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, with the argument that those public
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are the sole identity of the nation. Both arguments are much compelling as there doesn’t exist a harsh dark and light in the situations, but it lies in the
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area in actuality. Public
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including festivals, jatras(cultural rallies popular in Nepal), national days, etc are unique to a culture, group or place, and are the markers
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their identity. So, cutting
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to those
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for sparing
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some bucks for the
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might risk these unique heritages to go to extinction as we move throughout the years.
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, it may risk the extinction of an entire culture which for a country with a diverse heritage like Nepal, based predominantly on cultural tourism might be a much bigger problem in the future. The
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cutting corners in some public
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not in others, might
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come off as discriminatory to the
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of different cultures having their faith attached to those
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.
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, in the time of an economic crisis like the one we are currently in, the
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spending its
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lavish displays and
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could be debated as an unwise decision.
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can debate how those
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can be utilized in works of social reforms and development rather than a lavish display.
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, as the
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has its own limitations for the sources of revenue, spending it off
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events
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that might bring profit to the nation through tourism rather than on solid projects and development works that are guaranteed to bring back the investment would be a better decision if taking things logically. Taking all those things
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consideration, it is fairly a matter dependent upon the situation and the economic state of the nation. If I were the one to decide, considering the current situation of the
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, I would probably choose to mobilize the
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development projects rather than extravagant public displays.
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