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Advances in health and biology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better time to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#advances #health #biology #areas #society #years #time
To begin
 with , a lot of fast
food
have much
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 calories , so we can’t control our body fat ,
in contrast
 to
food
 that
make
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is made
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at
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in home
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in-home
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have
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has
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less
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fewer
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 calories , to
me
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be
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 more
clear
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clearly
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prepared meals
in
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at
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house
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home
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have
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are
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more controlled by
cooker
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the cooker
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while
 we don’t know who’s making meals in restaurants .
furthermore
, we are sure about all ingredients during cooking in house ,
for example
 most of people rely on fast
food
 because they don’t have time to make it so they are going to
loose
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lose
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 healthy by time
Secondly
 ,
phiscal
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physical
 and mental health are needed to fit
food
 . So we are going to take home-cook meals to preserve their body shape and keep
mind
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their mind
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 healthy , but when they
tends
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 to eat restaurants-
food
 daily That will reflect on their health after a period of time In conclusion, to keep our bodies healthy enough we should care about how
much
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many
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 calories get by taking
home-
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home food rather
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food
 rathe
fast
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than fast
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food
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