Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn news. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, the public
keep
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up with the latest
news
through different
media
.
While
, some people believe that
newspapers
are the best sources of
news
, others, myself included, think that people can be informed about
news
via other mass
media
. Those, who claim that
news
can be learnt best by
newspapers
, believe that they provide the most reliable
news
,
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since their sources are known. Having many publishers and editors,
which
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has
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been verified by official organizations, explains
this
credibility.
Whereas
, there might be no safeguards against some fake
news
published in other
media
,
such
as the Internet and some radio channels.
However
, I believe not all
newspapers
contain the original information.
For example
, some tabloid
newspapers
possess stories, that
was
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manipulated in order to make the stories more pleasant to the reader.
On the other hand
, there are other sorts of
media
, which are much more convenient than the mainstream
media
, like
newspapers
and magazines. Internet,
for instance
, is always available at any
times
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time
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, providing
this
opportunity to receive and check the
news
once they have been published.
That is
because
,
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it only needs the readers to open their cellphones or laptops and google the name of the
news
website.
Furthermore
, if the general public
seek
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the
news
online, they would not pay for anything,
whereas
they should buy
newspapers
, magazines or journals.
Last
, but not least, we are living
at
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the age of technology, where every facility is getting improved. I do not see any point
at
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not using different websites, YouTube and Instagram channels
,
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when they enable us to comment on the
news
or share them with friends.
Newspapers
do not offer these features to users. In conclusion, I believe that the Internet is a better source of
news
than
newspapers
, as it provides the reader not only
a
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faster access to updated
news
,
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but
also
it
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is cheaper and
suggest
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suggests
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many facilities, which
newspapers
lack.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • news coverage
  • perspectives
  • opinions
  • accessed
  • interactive
  • engaging
  • real-time
  • multimedia
  • combination
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