some people say that the main environment problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. others say that there are more important environmental problems. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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One of the conspicuous trends in today's world is the colossal upsurge in the problems regarding
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environment
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. There is a controversial debate about whether
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of specific habitats or plants is
the
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vital environmental issue or
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whether there
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are other reasons for it. In my viewpoint,
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agree with the
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one as there are more major concerns relating to
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. There are plausible reasons behind other
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impacting the
environment
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. First of all, human activities have affected
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nature
crutially
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crucially
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, which has a greater impact on
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the ovaerall
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ovaerall
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overall
environmental system.
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, mankind
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the
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nature for their own
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in many ways and does not think about the consequences of
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, using too many vehicles
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the carbon dioxide in the
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as well as
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reducing the fossil fuel.
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,
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excessive carbon
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polluting
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the
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and
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the balance in the
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. Meanwhile, cutting down
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for
constracting
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constructing
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more roads for access vehicles and the noise pollution
this
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trasportations
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transportations
transportation
creating, causing more
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for the
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. All these pollutions lead to global warming, which is the main cause of climate change and
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more concerning
issues
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for the
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.
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, the extinction of distinct plants or animals
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impacting the
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enormously.
Extiction
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Extraction
of any habitats
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the whole biodiversity and
make
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the ecosystem fragile.
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,
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the extiction
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extiction
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extinction
of birds can have a huge impact on
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, plants, insects and
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overall
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eco cycle
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ecocycle
. I
beleive
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believe
, there are many problems that are holding major concerns for
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environment
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the environment
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which may
leads
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to more habitat
extiction
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extinction
in the future.
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, people should focus on major
issues
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that are alarming for the
environment
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,
otherwise
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, it might be too late to
relaize
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realise
that there
are
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nothing much left to save.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • habitat
  • extinction
  • climate change
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • global warming
  • sustainable
  • conservation
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