There is a lot of pressure on young people today to succeed academically. As a result, some people believe that non-academic subjects, such as physical education and cookery, should be removed from the school syllabus so that children can concentrate on academic work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Till now, most of the academic curriculums of the world have been trying to keep a healthy balance between academic
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, I believe that too much focus on academic courses may benefit our careers at the cost of losing many social and practical skills.
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topics, we actually put ourselves at risk of losing touch with important survival capabilities. Those programs which offer some guidelines for activities like cooking, and exercise actually keep us fit for the non-career challenge. The person who never learnt how to cook or does not know the basic steps to keep Linking Words
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, I have seen students having very strong academic records suffering when they moved to new cities for higher study as they could not learn the basic survival skills of cooking or homemaking. Linking Words
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Giving up real-life skills for the sake of achieving higher subject matter expertise can lead to negative consequences. Linking Words
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, too many demanding syllabi of optional learning can make people reluctant to choose those. So we need to find a balance where participants will not feel that those courses are burdens in their day-to-day activities and Linking Words
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