Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays, technology is growing

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rapidly, and we show to entire various gadgets to individual’s lives.

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one of the treasures devices for people, especially

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teenagers. It has been observed that a number of children spend more time to use their phones daily.

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event is

due to

the fact of high attractiveness of

smartphones

.

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positive and negative aspects, which I agree with phones have more adverse impacts compared to beneficial aspects on young

people

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lives, since mobiles can influence on physical and spiritual of

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individual’s life.

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phones and

smartphones

have been made for easy

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communications

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among people.

Moreover

, they have a plethora of other applications

such

as installing

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numerous helpful programs, making friends

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social media and so on. The target

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making

this

device was to improve

communicate

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issues for adults.

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contrary

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children tend

more

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to use

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that, owing to the fact the programs

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smartphones

have

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attraction for them,

such

as game

app

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apps

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and social media. When

juvenile

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involve with

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app

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, they spend more time to

usage

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of

these

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.

For example

, social media like Instagram and

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has the more interesting apps for youth,

consequently

, parents observed that their son or girl

involves

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hours with mobiles.

On the other hand

, the extreme utilization of

smartphones

has more negative effects than positive shock on teenager’s future. The physical and mental brunt is

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undesirable

outcomes

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on

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young individuals. When a teenager plays a number of hours with

this

device, he or she suffers from lack of sleep, obesity and vision problems.

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stress and mood swings are subjective aspects of extreme usage of mobiles. In conclusion,

toddler

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have

high

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interest

for

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usage

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the usage

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of

smartphone

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smartphones

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, since

having

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more appealing programs and games. Even though, overuse and not controlled utilization of smartphone has unpleasant physical and intellectual impacts on

them

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future.