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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a contry, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#countries #people #salaries #contry #government #control #limit #amount
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working
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the working
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class
 high salaries
is
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are
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 a pretty good thing because
makes
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make
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 more rich the middle
class
 which is the
mainly
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main
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class
 that movements a
country
.
A
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For a
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country
 to be rich
don't
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it doesn't
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necessary
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necessarily
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 must have accounting millioners and billionaires
however
yours
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your
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 working
class
country
 could not be poor to the point
to be
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of being
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 compared to a developing or undeveloped
contry
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country
.
Wealth
 concentration could be a issue
due to
this
wealth
 can not be shared
throught
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through
 the people that
lives
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live
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 in
this
 space entailing a huge space of
wealth
 concentration between
middle
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the middle
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class
 and millioners and billionaires
makes
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making
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 things
became
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become
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 more
expansive
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expensive
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 for
working
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the working
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class
 as rent, food and so on.
Consequences
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The consequences
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 of
it
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apply
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it's a poor working
class
.
A
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An
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 article from New York Times titled "Why Poverty Persists in America" shows that between 1970 and 2019 the
avarage
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average
 percentage of poor people in
america
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America
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it
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apply
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was
from
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apply
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12.9% and beyond the concentration of billionaires the
desindustrialization
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deindustrialization
de-industrialization
 is a cause too when we talk about lost wealthily by working
class
. To renew a
working
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working-class
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class
sociaty
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society
 a
contry
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country
 must
have
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apply
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reindustrialize a
country
 put it high significantly industries and promote
to
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apply
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technology for
this
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these
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 companies
therefore
,
working
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the working
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class
 can
expande
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expand
your
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their
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wealth
 and just
so
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apply
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get
it
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apply
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hight
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high
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paid
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salaries. Now rich
contries
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countries
 are
fancing
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facing
 a new
moviment
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movement
 of desindustrialization
beacause
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because
 in
90s
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the 90s
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 they left aside the industries
instead
 of using
liberla
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the liberla
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 model, the consequences are the
one's
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ones
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 that we
seen
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see
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 now, more poor people and
working
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the working
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class
 stagnat. Now
contries
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countries
 have to run of prejudice.
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