Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It is true that the main reason
of
habitual Change preposition
for
festivals
are
forgotten and that Change the verb form
is
people
attend these cermonies
for Correct your spelling
ceremonies
a
more recreational purposes. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
While
I agree that it becomes
more common to have fun during Wrong verb form
has become
festivals
, I believe that there are still some committments
to traditions that lead to Correct your spelling
commitments
people'
appearance.
On the one hand, I think, Change noun form
people's
festivals
have their roots in the past when people
have
to arrange them to protect their lives or even be safe from religious punishments Wrong verb form
had
although
they may not have that much seriousness for today
Change noun form
today's
generations
. Fix the agreement mistake
generation
For example
, in some traditional tribes, members had to present a symbolic pray
for god in the spring to offer their admiration Replace the word
prayer
as well as
respect and therfore garantee
the survival of their lands and Correct your spelling
therefore guarantee
cultivaion
in the following year, Correct your spelling
cultivation
otherwise
they might lose yeilds
. In comparison, nowadays Correct your spelling
yields
people
have no need for such
a festival to protect their lives.
On the other hand
, despite considering festivals
as ways of enjoyment, poeple
are still participating to celebrate annual traditions to confirm with whatever their Correct your spelling
people
ancecters
Correct your spelling
ancestors
believed
. Take Wrong verb form
believe
mouring
as an instance, Correct your spelling
mourning
modernzed
Correct your spelling
modernized
people
may not mourn as deep
as their old generation did for an old well-known person or they may even see it as a recreative event, but they Change the word
deeply
also
show their respect and give importance to its relogional
aspects by gathering and doing symbolic Correct your spelling
regional
mouring
. By doing Correct your spelling
mourning
this
, they not only protect traditions and customs from being vanished,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
promote it
to be in the minds of future ones.
In conclusion, Correct pronoun usage
them
although
the main aspects of presenting festivals
may become vivide
and Correct your spelling
vivid
people
have dun during festival
period, there are still firm beliefs about them in their minds.Add an article
the festival
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