Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It is true that the main reason
of
habitual Change preposition
for
festivals
Use synonyms
are
forgotten and that Change the verb form
is
people
attend these Use synonyms
cermonies
for Correct your spelling
ceremonies
a
more recreational purposes. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
While
I agree that it Linking Words
becomes
more common to have fun during Wrong verb form
has become
festivals
, I believe that there are still some Use synonyms
committments
to traditions that lead to Correct your spelling
commitments
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people'
appearance.
On the one hand, I think, Change noun form
people's
festivals
have their roots in the past when Use synonyms
people
Use synonyms
have
to arrange them to protect their lives or even be safe from religious punishments Wrong verb form
had
although
they may not have that much seriousness for Linking Words
today
Change noun form
today's
generations
. Fix the agreement mistake
generation
For example
, in some traditional tribes, members had to present a symbolic Linking Words
pray
for god in the spring to offer their admiration Replace the word
prayer
as well as
respect and Linking Words
therfore garantee
the survival of their lands and Correct your spelling
therefore guarantee
cultivaion
in the following year, Correct your spelling
cultivation
otherwise
they might lose Linking Words
yeilds
. In comparison, nowadays Correct your spelling
yields
people
have no need for Use synonyms
such
a festival to protect their lives.
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On the other hand
, despite considering Linking Words
festivals
as ways of enjoyment, Use synonyms
poeple
are still participating to celebrate annual traditions to confirm with whatever their Correct your spelling
people
ancecters
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ancestors
believed
. Take Wrong verb form
believe
mouring
as an instance, Correct your spelling
mourning
modernzed
Correct your spelling
modernized
people
may not mourn as Use synonyms
deep
as their old generation did for an old well-known person or they may even see it as a recreative event, but they Change the word
deeply
also
show their respect and give importance to its Linking Words
relogional
aspects by gathering and doing symbolic Correct your spelling
regional
mouring
. By doing Correct your spelling
mourning
this
, they not only protect traditions and customs from being vanishedLinking Words
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
promote Linking Words
it
to be in the minds of future ones.
In conclusion, Correct pronoun usage
them
although
the main aspects of presenting Linking Words
festivals
may become Use synonyms
vivide
and Correct your spelling
vivid
people
have dun during Use synonyms
festival
period, there are still firm beliefs about them in their minds.Add an article
the festival
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