Some people think that museum should be enjoyable place to entertain people while others believe that the purpose of them is to educate.discuss both views and give your opinion..

Nowadays,plenty of facilities give fun and some individuals think that
museum
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also
should be
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attaching
,
however
,
opinion
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the opinion
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of others
that
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is that
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the main goal of
museum
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the museum
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is to educate.I
belive
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believe
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that
purpose
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the purpose
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of
museum
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the museum
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should guide
people
than
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rather than
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to enjoy.
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,
such
places as
museum
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museums
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iclude
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include
variety
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a variety
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of ancient items,
history
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and history
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books,which are significantly valuable,can not be funny.
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,if
people
were
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to have
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fun there,it would be
such
as simple entertainment
palce
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place
.For
instanse
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instance
,
mostly
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most
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people
go there to familiarize themself with either
culture
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the culture
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or
history
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the history
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of
museum
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museums
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about
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apply
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.Those,I think it is not
entertaiment
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entertainment
consuming place,it is
area
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an area
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where persons search for some unique times of history or something similar.
Secondly
,it is not relevant
about
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to
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carry
of
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apply
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special information about events and ancient
time
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times
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.
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museum
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a museum
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as
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a
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place for enjoying could lead
wrong
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to wrong
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consequences,
such
as
to aceept
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accepting
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this
main data as
joke
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a joke
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or unbeneficial trash.For
exaple
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example
,if
people
gone
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went
have gone
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to play there,it would be
unserious
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an unserious
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site to study in
this
discipline.Afterwards,In my opinion
museum
is
nessecary
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necessary
to
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for
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individual's
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an individual's
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degree and for
sciense
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science
. In conclusion,museums include more
education
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educational
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items rather than
entertainments
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entertainment
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and
such
places carry important data.I
belive
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believe
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that
museum
places are made up
to
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for
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development
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the development
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of
degree
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degrees
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.
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