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compare and contrast shopping habits of different generations. Discuss their preferences, motivated, attituteds

Currently, people recognize the
distinguish
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 of shopping
habits
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 between different generations. Each
generations
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generation
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have
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has
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 their own preferences,
habits
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, and
attituteds
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attitudes
 on buying
products
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.
This
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 essay will compare those clearly
Initially
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, the biggest issue is preference when they
purchasing
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purchase
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 something.
Millenials
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Millennials
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prefer
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prefer to
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 listen to reviews from their relatives
such
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 as close friends,
neighborhoods
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neighbourhoods
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, or even their children.
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,
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the lastest
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lastest
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latest
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 group of ages might get information and reviews online from users. It seems like those two ages want to ensure about the
products
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 before
buy
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buying
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it
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them
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,
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 but in opposite ways. A
further
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 point to discuss is
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habits
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the habits
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 of buying stuff. Parents
seems
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seem
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 like they have an ethical purchasing.
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, they would love to get some
products
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 that
worthwhile
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are worthwhile
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, especially technology devices.
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,
student
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students
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ages
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are
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concern
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concerned
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 about being an old-fashioned person.
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, they often buy trending
products
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. Another
contrastion
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contraction
contrast
 is what
make
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makes
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 them
to
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apply
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think about when they want to buy something.
For older
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Older
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 people,
they
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apply
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are more careful
on
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about
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 getting goods like caring about insurance.
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, applying vouchers or
discount
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discounts
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 could appeal
teenagers
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to teenagers
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.
To conclude
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, Generations hugely
effect
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affect
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to
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apply
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the way
consumers'
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consumers
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decision
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decide
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of purchasing
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to purchase
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. Those difference have their own positive and negative attributes.
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, the
resembly
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assembly
 of
those generation preference
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that generation preference
those generation preferences
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 and
habits
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 contribute to the guarantee for better shopping.

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task achievement
Provide a more detailed introduction that clearly states the purpose of the essay and includes an overview of the main points that will be discussed.
task achievement
Ensure that each main point is supported with specific examples and explanations.
coherence cohesion
Organize the essay in a more coherent manner, using clear topic sentences for each paragraph.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary and vary sentence structures to improve lexical resource and grammatical range and accuracy.
coherence cohesion
Provide a stronger conclusion that summarizes the main points and provides a final thought on the topic.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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