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Some people think everyone should be a vegetarian, because we do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are many with the opinion that meat does not provide a nutritious meal, so everybody should become a vegetarian
instead
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. In
this
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 essay, I will explain the reasons why I strongly do not agree with
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 statement at all.
Firstly
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, the primary reason why I disagree is because of the fact that meat is a major source of protein.
To begin
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 with, our body depends on breaking them down to function; without
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 process, we would be unable to make a single muscle movement. So chicken legs or beef steaks are fundamental for muscle growth and fitness.
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 there are other sources of protein
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 as lentils and chickpeas, they do not contain enough of it in comparison to animals. So, eating less meat will certainly affect the body (and
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 the health) in being weaker and poorer in strength.
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, the fact that consuming the flesh of animals makes a
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 more balanced is another reason why I disagree. Unlike what is stated in the statement, a healthy balanced
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 requires the intake of sweets, fat, vitamins, proteins and carbohydrates.
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 vegetarian food may provide all the vitamins and nutrients, it does not provide much of the others. A steak
for example
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 contains both fat and protein
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 some sweet. When lunch and dinner are served with roasted potatoes or mushrooms, gravy and chicken breast,
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 when the
diet
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 is truly balanced. Thereby, all elements are necessary to call that food intake healthy.
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, there are numerous reasons why I disagree with the claim that all should become vegetarian to have a healthy
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 as opposed to consuming animals
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 of the aforementioned discussion. The reasons are that they are important in providing energy to the body and serving a balanced menu.
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