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Some people feel that the legal age at which people can marry should be at least 21. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Marriage
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 is a special and important event in your
life
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 and some individuals believe that a couple should have a minimum
age
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 of 21 before they can legally marry each other. It is believed that it is right to postpone
marriage
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 to the
age
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 of 21
instead
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 of the current 18 years of
age
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.
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 essay will give 2 reasons why
people
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 should not commit to each other for the law until they are 21 years old. First of all, at the
age
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 of 21,
people
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 have more
life
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 experience and are more capable of making major decisions in
life
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. It is said that the majority of 21-year-olds have lived on their own and are able to look after themselves compared to younger
people
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 who are dependent on their parents.
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, students who live alone need to be able to cook their own meals and know how to pay their own rent.
This
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 gives them more
life
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 experience.
Secondly
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, the amount of
people
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 who have a full-time job has increased by the
age
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 of 21, and will
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 have more financial stability. If a person is economically independent, it has a better capability to look after themselves and their partner and
therefore
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 more able to maintain the relationship.
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, financial independence will decrease the pressure on a partnership, and it will increase higher chances of success in the future. In conclusion, 21-year-olds have more
life
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 experience and are more likely to be economically independent.
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 will increase the odds of a successful young
marriage
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. I personally believe that it is important to legalize
marriage
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 from the
age
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 of 21.

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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Legal age
  • Marriage
  • Maturity
  • Stability
  • Individual choice
  • Freedom
  • Cultural practices
  • Religious practices
  • Education
  • Career aspirations
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