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What are advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad?

#country #study
There are more and more people who choose
go
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 far from home, looking for new opportunities or adventures. The good key factor of living or
study
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studying
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oversea
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overseas
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 is gaining foreign experience and getting a high-powered job.
However
, homesickness and cultural differences can pose a problem. As for
advantages
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the advantages
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 of abroad
is that
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 there is a chance to broaden your horizons,
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and getting
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getting
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get
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 experience from foreign experts.
Young
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The young
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 generation who studies at external universities,
they
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get
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the skill
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skill
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skills
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, that they would not receive in their hometown.
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, there
are
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majority
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the majority
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 of top higher education
institution
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institutions
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,
such
 as Harvard,
Cambridge
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and Cambridge
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, where students have a
posibility
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possibility
 to listen to
power
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powerful
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 professors, or advanced companies are usually located abroad,
such
 as Microsoft or
Goggle
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Google
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. These businesses offer
a well-paid jobs
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well-paid jobs
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.
By contrast
, despite great opportunities, it is vital to be ready
for
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to
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being
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leave
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 for a long time out of home.
Moreover
, when people face
with
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cultural distinction, it is hard to communicate with foreigners,
such
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and such
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problem
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problems
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 lead to homesickness.
For instance
,
person
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the person
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 who
suffer
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suffers
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 from nostalgia
,
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 is subject to stress more. In
conclusin
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conclusion
,
although
 people moving from their motherland, seeking
good
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a good
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 life. They can face
with
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serious consequences.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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