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Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #choices #matters #food #clothes #entertainment #society #individuals #decisions
Few people think that
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 allowing children to make their own
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 can make them selfish.
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other
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others
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 believe that, if children will make their own
decision
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 can help them in future growth.In my
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 parents should let their students
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take
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 their own decisions. It will help them to
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 with leadership
skill
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 and can build the capability to understand what is right and what is wrong.
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, if
child
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a child
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 takes
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 individual
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, he does not have an option to failure.
This
 will help him to groom his own skill or leadership
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 because he has to blame himself for wrong decisions and
this
 will allow him to think and take out the best solution for his failure, which is good for his progress in life.
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, If a
child
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 hyper and he makes bad choices, which is not good for him or in
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society
then
 parents should participate in his decisions to make him understand if it is wrong or right. If
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will be
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 allowed to
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 a wrong
decision
then
 it will make him selfish and dangerous
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 society.
However
,
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 not always good for someone to
take
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 their own
decision
. So, in my
overall
 opinion, if
child
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decisions
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 it can help them
as well as
 it can destroy their personality.
However
, parents should keep
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 and allow
child
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their child
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 to
take
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 some
decision
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decisions
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by
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 their own, just like
selection
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the selection
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 of food, entertainment etc and another important
decision
parent
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parents
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 should play a vital role in
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and give their input in it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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