Some people saay that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so commin that we no linger pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Our world is filled with
advertisements
that make
people
purchase products,
however
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some argue that those have become too common and ineffective in promoting things. In my opinion, many companies have learned to adapt to changing customer behaviour and found new ways to catch
people
's
attention
. The
attention
span has become shorter over the years.
Therefore
, old advertising platforms
such
as TV and radio no longer interest
people
, since the
advertisements
are long and not interesting. In
this
case
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I do understand, why some think that we don't pay
attention
to promotions anymore.
Furthermore
, a lot of ads have become similar to each other, which makes it harder for companies to compete for
the
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attention
, since everybody is making the same promises to
people
.
Although
,
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the behaviour
have
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changed,
people
still get influenced by the
advertisements
they see. Companies that are up to date, know in which platforms their target audience is spending most of the time. Social media has become
of
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the main ones.
For instance
, products that are promoted by influencers are sold better than those through classical poster ads since not only do clients get the purchase
,
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but
also
the lifestyle they desire. By knowing the characteristics of the audience,
advertisements
are, in my opinion, still relevant and are able to capture the
attention
of
people
.
To conclude
,
although
it is true, that
advertisements
are too common, it only applies to old methods of promoting. These days
businesess
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businesses
that learn about their audiences' behaviour, are able to conduct
such
ads on social media that create desirable outcomes. That's why, I do believe in the power of advertisement.
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