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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line
chart
 below compares the fluctuation of using three different
electrical based
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electrical-based
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 instruments and
amount
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the amount
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 of weekly spending time for household
managment
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management
 per hour
since
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from
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 1920 to 2019. In the first diagram,
usage
 of either washing machine
or
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apply
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refrigerator
 or
vacuum
 cleaner experienced
dramatically
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a dramatically
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 increasing
trend
 of appliance
usage
 from
total
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a total
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 of 100% and eventually both
refrigerator
 and
vacuum
 cleaners'
usage
rate
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rates
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touch
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touched
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 the peak of popularity.In
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the seconad
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seconad
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second
chart
, as
it
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apply
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can observed people
tends
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tend
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 to
spent
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spend
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less
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fewer
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 weekly
hours
for
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apply
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doing housework
by
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with
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 a significant descending
trend
. In 1920, people almost did not use refrigerators at all But washing
maching
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machine
usage
 was the most popular one
also
vacuum
 cleaner was the second in
popularity
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popular
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 with
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a number
the number
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number of
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apply
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40 per
cent
 and 30 per
cent
 respectively.it
worth
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is worth
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 mentioning that
refrigerator
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the refrigerator
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consumtion
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consumption
 rate
reach
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reached
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bottom
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the bottom
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 to
top
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the top
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 quickly, in
other hand
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another hand
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 all the three houseworks' instruments show
significant
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a significant
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 increase and higher growing
trend
 of
refigerators'
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refrigerators
usage
 made two
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the breakout
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breakout
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breakouts
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aroud
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around
 year of 1940 and
number
 of almost 60 per
cent
.
Finally
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Finally,
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 both ownership of
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refrigerators
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refrigerator
 and
vacuum
 cleaners touch the highest
number
at
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in
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chart
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the chart
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 but the peak
of
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for
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 washing
machine
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machines
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 was
a
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apply
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75 per
cent
. In one line
chart
 of second shown charts the
number
 of weekly
usage
 of three mentioned appliances as housework tools started with
number
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a number
the number
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 of 50
hours
, but with a decreasing
trend
 of
houseworking
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house working
housework
hours
 between 1920 to 1960 average of
houseworkings'
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housewarmings
 time reach to 10
hours
 per week and with a steady
trend
 ends with 10
hours
 in 2019.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, usage, refrigerator, vacuum, trend, hours, number, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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