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A local Newspaper is conducting a survey to know whether their paper should have more news or more discounts and offers.

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I would prefer that newspapers should have information about offers and coupons
instead
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 of more
news
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. Let me explain the two main reasons.
Firstly
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, there are ample ways to watch both local
as well as
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 international
news
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due to
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 the advent of technology.
In other words
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,
people
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 acquire information from online media sources
such
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 as
youtube
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, and Google to update them regarding local and world
news
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.
For example
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, the business survey report depicts that newspaper sales have declined by 40% because of the online
news
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 trend.
Secondly
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,
people
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 are looking for more coupons and offers which will benefit them predominantly in their daily lives. If they could utilize a food voucher posted in the newspaper help them save money on one meal.
Moreover
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,
this
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 will influence
people
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 to buy more newspapers, which in turn increases the value of the business.
To conclude
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, in my opinion,
people
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 have various ways to read
news
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, so I believe that publishing more vouchers and offers benefits both
people
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 and the newspaper business.

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