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The chart below shows the Japan’s population by age groups starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the Japan’s population by age groups starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the Japanese age groups from 1960 and predicts their
population
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 in 2040.
Overall
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, The age 25-64 took the largest proportion in history and is predicted to keep
this
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 position in future, even though it has had a downtrend recently.
Similarly
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, the
group
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 of 0-14 stood
second
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 during the first 40 years and is projected to drop. Meanwhile, the lowest
population
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group
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 used to be
group
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 65,
nonetheless
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, it rose rapidly, swapping the
second
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 till 2040. Starting with 65% of the whole country’s
population
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 in 1960, the
group
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 of 25-64 had a modest increase and kept stable at around 70% during the next 20 years before having a gradual fall from 1990 to 2030
then
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 it is estimated to a minimal rise to nearly 60% in 2040.
On the other hand
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, the youngest
group
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 stood
second
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 with 30% of the
population
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 at the beginning of
this
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 counted time,
although
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 it had moderate growth, it slightly fluctuated during 2 following decades
then
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 constantly fell since 1990.
Moreover
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,
this
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group
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 is predicted to reduce to 10% in 2040.
On the contrary
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, the oldest
group
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 marked an upward trend during the whole surveyed period. It was only 0.5% of the
population
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 was the age of 65+,
nevertheless
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, it was growing year by year and is forecasted to increase to 35% in 2040,
in addition
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, It became the
second
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 most crowded
group
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 since 2003.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, group, second with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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