A friend who lives in another country has invited you to come and stay with him/her on your next holiday. You are too busy to accept the invitation. write a letter to your friend. In your letter ● thank him/her for the invitation ● explain why you cannot come ● ask him about another time to visit

Dear Dildora, I hope my letter will find you in good health. First of all, thank you for inviting me. I am so happy that you invited me to my next vacation. After hearing
this
news, I really wanted to go. But, I can not go , unfortunately. Because
this
holiday I want to renovate my
house
. My
house
had not been repaired for a long
time
, so the
house
was in dire need of repair.
This
time
I can't fix it well.
Therefore
, I have to decline your offer. But I will definitely go on the next holiday if you invite me. Because by
then
the
house
will be out of repair.
Then
the free
time
also
increases. If you
also
have
time
, we will definitely go on a trip next holiday. I hope that we will have a good
time
together and that you will definitely let me know when you are free. Best wishes, Shahzoda
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coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the letter needs improvement. Make sure to clearly address each point mentioned in the task prompt in separate paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Include a proper greeting and closing in the letter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea. Divide the content into separate paragraphs to enhance clarity and coherence.
task achievement
Make sure to explain in detail why you cannot accept the invitation.
lexical resource
Add more information about the next holiday and express your eagerness to visit then.
grammatical range and accuracy
Review the use of grammar and sentence structure for improved accuracy.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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