some people believe that the earth is being damaged by human activity . others feel that human activity makes earth a better place to live in. what is your opinion

A section of people believe that human actions are continuously devastating the
earth
.
However
, others argue that human involvement makes
Earth
a better place to reside by decreasing its deterioration rate. Both arguments need proper scrutiny before forming an opinion. I would like to explicate in the paragraphs to come. The advocates of the first view deem that human actions are damaging the
earth
.
For instance
, new technology helps us in many ways, agriculture is one of them. Scientists regularly analyse
this
section to find better ways of growing crops. Mostly farmers use chemicals in their fields to proliferate the yield in less time which fulfills people's needs. These chemicals stay in the field for a long time because it takes a long period to integrate with the soil.
consequently
, the soil gets negatively impacted and starts losing its quality. The opposite school of thought argues that human actions are making
Earth
a better place to reside. To explain it, there is no doubt that advanced technology improves the quality of life. But new technology needs a lot of raw material in order to be used successfully on a daily basis
for
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example, trains , cable wires and mobile phones. The raw material used for these products
dump
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is dumped
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into rivers or canals
along with
other gases which later on
mixed
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up with other gases in the environment.
As a result
, the environment becomes a victim of
greenhouse
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the greenhouse
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effect and acid rain. Considering that
,
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earth
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the earth
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is a better place to live if
surroundings
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the surroundings
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do not suffer negatively
due to
human deeds. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that
eath
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each
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suffers from a lot of damage
due to
human involvement which in turn, affects the human
and
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quality of life they are living .
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Provide a clear opinion in the introduction section.
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Expand on the arguments and provide more supporting details and examples.
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Use more precise and specific vocabulary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • renewable resources
  • carbon footprint
  • conservation
  • ecology
  • emissions
  • fossil fuels
  • greenhouse gases
  • habitat destruction
  • industrialization
  • pollutants
  • recycling
  • urbanization
  • deforestation
  • ecosystem
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