The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres or route and passenger numbers per year in millions.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres or route and passenger numbers per year in millions.
The table illustrates the information
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underground railway systems in six big cities all around the world.
Overall
, the train
system
with the highest number of
kilometers
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of
route
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is owned by London.
Furthermore
, Kyoto has the lowest figures
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annual
passengers
. The underground railway
system
of London has the highest number of
kilometers
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of route, which
supported
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by the fact that it is the oldest one among the other cities. On the other side, the smallest amount of route distance can be found in Kyoto’s train
system
, reaching only 11
kilometers
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. It is
also
the second youngest infrastructure compared to the ones located in the other cities. The lowest figures
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annual
passengers
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contributed by Kyoto’s railway
system
, where there are 45
millions
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passengers
per year.
Conversely
, the train
system
of Tokyo is the most crowded one. There are 1.928
millions
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passengers
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average who use
this
facility annually.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railway system
  • chronologically
  • significance
  • correlation
  • discrepancies
  • outliers
  • extensive network
  • limited network
  • urban sprawl
  • efficiency
  • hypothesize
  • passenger numbers
  • kilometres of route
  • date opened
  • major cities
  • data analysis
  • comparative analysis
  • historical context
  • speculate
  • potential causes
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