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some people beleive zoos have no purpose in todays world and should be closed. what problems do zoos bring? what are the alternatives to zoos if they are clsoed?

#people #beleive #zoos #purpose #todays #world #alternatives
A huge number of individuals have an opinion that
zoos
 are outdated in
this
 modern era and should be
shutdown
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, in my opinion,
zoos
 do create a lot of problems and should be looked after
taken
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and taken
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 care of with different alternatives. one of the most common
problem
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 created because of
zoos
 is animal
cruelity
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cruelty
, which causes
problem
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problems
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 for both humans and
animals
.
for example
,
Mnay
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many
 wildlife
animals
 are suffering because of
this
 issue the main reason behind
this
 is that
,
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 the zoo keepers are not taking good care of the
animals
 nor they are providing them
the
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 right amount and quality of food,
this
 is because
lack
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 of training and low interaction from the
goverment
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government
 in
this
 sector, Many pressure
grpups
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groups
 are being created because of
this
 who are doing protest and demonstration to prove there view regarding
animals
 rights and the management of the zoo.
furthermore
, if we decide to shut down
teh
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the
zoos
 there are many alternatives we can look into
for example
zoos
 owners can create
safari
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 in which
instead
 of keeping
animals
 in cages, we can set
free
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them free
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 with secure
boundries
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boundaries
 and can see the wildlife through a car or jeep and let
animals
 enjoy on there own, another thing we can do is to create a digital zoo using the latest technology
instead
 of keeping real
animals
 which
lsot
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lost
 a lot as well. in my point of
view
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zoos
 can still be operational if we adopt new
technology's
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technology
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 and move on from the traditional style to overcome the problems and still if we
cant
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can't
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 tackle the issue.
then
 there is no option
then
shutting
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 them down.
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