Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

It can’t be denied that the rapid development of technology has given us many positive impacts. It has helped us in many possible ways. With the help of technology, it’s easier to mobilize
products
from
one
country to another country.
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my perspective, I see it as a positive development. Some of my reasons include,
firstly
, the same
products
anywhere in the world let more people
to
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experience new things and exchange each country’s culture and
interest
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.
For instance
, when sushi went worldwide including to
Indonesia
, I, as an
Indonesian
, was able to taste
one
of the iconic foods from Japan even though I have never been to Japan.
Likewise
,
Japanese
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were
also
able to taste rendang
as
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one
of the
Indonesian
iconic foods
went
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worldwide.
This
allowed
Indonesian
and Japanese to exchange their country’s food culture.
Secondly
, it can
also
encourage more innovation and creativity. As an example, Korea is known for having the best skincare
products
and it has gained popularity in
Indonesia
.
This
encourages
Indonesia
to create local skincare
products
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the same ingredients. Eventually, many people complimented and gave good reviews about
Indonesian
skincare
products
which have
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good quality and affordable prices.
Lastly
, it could
also
let people from all over the world communicate and relate to each other.
For instance
, Indomie,
as
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one
of the popular instant noodles in
Indonesia
, is available in America.
However
, the taste and price in both
Indonesia
and America
is
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hugely different.
Thus
,
this
can be
one
of the ways to connect
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and
American
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by sharing their own experiences and stories.
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  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
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