Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
It can’t be denied that the rapid development of technology has given us many positive impacts. It has helped us in many possible ways. With the help of technology, it’s easier to mobilize
products
from one
country to another country. In
my perspective, I see it as a positive development. Some of my reasons include, Change preposition
From
firstly
, the same products
anywhere in the world let more people to
experience new things and exchange each country’s culture and Change the verb form
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interest
. Fix the agreement mistake
interests
For instance
, when sushi went worldwide including to Indonesia
, I, as an Indonesian
, was able to taste one
of the iconic foods from Japan even though I have never been to Japan. Likewise
, Japanese
were Correct article usage
the Japanese
also
able to taste rendang as
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one
of the Indonesian
iconic foods went
worldwide. Correct pronoun usage
that went
This
allowed Indonesian
and Japanese to exchange their country’s food culture. Secondly
, it can also
encourage more innovation and creativity. As an example, Korea is known for having the best skincare products
and it has gained popularity in Indonesia
. This
encourages Indonesia
to create local skincare products
that are using
the same ingredients. Eventually, many people complimented and gave good reviews about Wrong verb form
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Indonesian
skincare products
which have a
good quality and affordable prices. Remove the article
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Lastly
, it could also
let people from all over the world communicate and relate to each other. For instance
, Indomie, as
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one
of the popular instant noodles in Indonesia
, is available in America. However
, the taste and price in both Indonesia
and America is
hugely different. Change the verb form
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Thus
, this
can be one
of the ways to connect Indonesian
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Indonesians
American
by sharing their own experiences and stories.Replace the word
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task achievement
Include a clear thesis statement in your introduction that states whether you think the development is positive or negative.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay in a logical manner with clear topic sentences for each paragraph.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas.
grammatical range accuracy
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to avoid errors.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion