Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
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task achievement
Include a clear thesis statement in your introduction that states whether you think the development is positive or negative.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay in a logical manner with clear topic sentences for each paragraph.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas.
grammatical range accuracy
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to avoid errors.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion