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Writing Samples
Band 8

A building company is planning to build new houses on some land near where you live and has asked the people to give their comments. Write a letter to the manager of the building company and - Say how you heard about the plan of the building company - Give your opinion of the plan - Say what you hope the building company will do.

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Dear [Recipient's Name], I am writing to express my perspective on the proposed development of new apartments and detached houses in the vicinity of my colony. It has come to my attention that your esteemed company is considering the commencement of construction in March 2024, and the news has been widely discussed in the local newspapers and on TV channels. I believe that the construction of new homes will not only provide a beautiful landscape but
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 contribute to the development of our community by bringing in more facilities to meet the needs of the residents. In
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 regard, may I suggest that you ensure ample space for parks, as they are often frequented by both elders and children for their recreational needs. As a resident, I am thrilled about
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 project, and I speak for the entire community when I say that we have high hopes
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 your organization to build supermarkets, schools, and healthcare facilities in the future to cater to the growing needs of the area. Thank you for considering
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 project, and we look forward to the positive impact it will have on our region. Sincerely, [Your Name]

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Coherence & Cohesion
Your letter is well-structured and progresses logically through the topics addressed. Each paragraph clearly focuses on a single theme which greatly aids in the reader's understanding.
Coherence & Cohesion
To improve coherence, consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more seamlessly.
Task Achievement
You have successfully addressed all parts of the task with adequate detail. However, to further improve task achievement, you might consider including more direct expressions of your personal opinion on the development, providing a balance between prospective benefits and any concerns you might have.
Task Achievement
Ensure your tone remains formal and appropriate throughout the letter. You've done well here, but always be cautious of slipping into a conversational tone, particularly when sharing personal opinions.
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