The line graph shows the Population in the state of Oregon by county. Three counties that incresed in population between 1940 and 2000, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington had shown the different increasing.

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The line graph shows the

Population

in the state of Oregon by county. Three

counties

that

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increased

increase

incresed

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increased

population

between 1940 and 2000,

Columbia

Yamhill

and

Washington

had shown the different increasing. The

population

Columbia

had risen to just under 36,000 by 1970.

Although

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However

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, the graph of

the

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apply

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Columbia

shows

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a slightly

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slightly increasing

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. The nearly encreased county is

Yamhill

. Between 1940 and 1970,

Yamhills

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Yamhill's

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populaton

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population

rose from 30,000 to 45,000.

This

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These

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two

counties

have

the

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similar

increasing

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increase

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Moreover

, the real

increase

was in

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Washington

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washington

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Washington

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, where

population

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the population

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had increased by approximately 75,000, to 125,000 in 1940. In

years

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the years

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between 1940 and 1970 all

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three

counties

had shown

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showed

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a slightely

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slightely

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slightly

similar

increase

Forthemore

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Furthermore

, the

Washingtons

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Washington

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population

incresing

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increasing

is the

gratest

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greatest

While

the

Columbia

and

Yamhill

rose from 1940 and 2000, the

Washington

had shown the best rose.

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Although

Altough

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Although

the

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apply

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Washington

shows

rising

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a rise

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from about 125,000 in 1970 that was slighter than

increase

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the increase

an increase

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population

between 1940 and 1970.

Columbia

and

Yamhill

had

rose

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risen

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gradually.

This

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These

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two

counties

increase

by approximately the same amounts. They

are

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both increased by nearly 50%.

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6Word repetition
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9 paragraphs

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The line graph shows the Population in the state of Oregon by county. Three counties that incresed in population between 1940 and 2000, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington had shown the different increasing.

Government should spend money to increase the development of sport and art for school students rather than supporting professional sport and art performances for general public. Do you agree or disagree?

1) The subjects that children are taught in schools are chosen by central authorities .Some people say that teachers not politicians should be responsible for this task to what extent you agree or disagree with this opinion?

2.It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

Some people think that only the government can make significant changes in society, while others think that individuals can have a lot of influence. What is your opinion?

Some people loves to stay on the same routine and the other like to try and make a different in their lives cycle, It is depending on the person itself whether he want to make something new or not.