The line graph shows the Population in the state of Oregon by county. Three counties that incresed in population between 1940 and 2000, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington had shown the different increasing.

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The line graph shows the

Population

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in the state of Oregon by county. Three

counties

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that

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increased

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incresed

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increased

population

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between 1940 and 2000,

Columbia

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Yamhill

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and

Washington

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had shown the different increasing. The

population

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Columbia

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had risen to just under 36,000 by 1970.

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Columbia

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slightly increasing

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. The nearly encreased county is

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. Between 1940 and 1970,

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Yamhill's

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populaton

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population

rose from 30,000 to 45,000.

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, the real

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washington

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, where

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had increased by approximately 75,000, to 125,000 in 1940. In

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between 1940 and 1970 all

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three

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slightly

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incresing

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greatest

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the

Columbia

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and

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rose from 1940 and 2000, the

Washington

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had shown the best rose.

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Washington

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shows

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from about 125,000 in 1970 that was slighter than

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increase

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population

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between 1940 and 1970.

Columbia

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and

Yamhill

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had

rose

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gradually.

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two

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by approximately the same amounts. They

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both increased by nearly 50%.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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